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Where I try to scare you with a text

by John on October 20th, 2011

Please, tell me you’re getting this. I’m not sure which way is which. I’m so so cold. And tired. They’re almost here. Run. Please. I love you.


Compose a post in the form of a text–160 characters.
Your text must elicit or express fear.
70 Comments
  1. I could totally send that text to anyone I know. Only I’d remind them of the importance of stocking up on cheese.

  2. I would be scared if I got this text. Nicely done.

  3. Aak!

    Oh no!

    Does s/he run?

    I must know!

    (Well done, clearly!)

    • The person texted? Does not run. I don’t know too many details yet – but I know that much.

  4. This one makes me nervous!

    • The goal was to scare you wasn’t it? Thanks for visiting πŸ™‚

  5. Well, I want to know how it ends!

    • I’m hoping to expand this to my NaNoWriMo project – so check back sometime for a much wordier conclusion…

  6. Oh wow, that was good. I could feel the urgency, the fear in him. Well done!!!

  7. This is scary in so many different levels!

  8. OH God! I am already running. That text is damn scary.

    • Here’s the thing – the person that this was sent to? Doesn’t run (otherwise, the story might be very, very different)

  9. yep, she’s as scared as you.

    good job

    although when my teenager texts me “we have to go to the mall tonight” i get equally as creeped.

    • I nearly put “I don’t know how to tell you this, but I’m pregnant” as the “scary text.”

      Now that I think about it, though, “Dad, I need you to take me bra shopping” might be the scariest possible text, ever.

  10. Is there somewhere that you can rest and hide?

  11. Tired and cold sounds so defeated πŸ™ Great job!

    • yeah – that was the goal . . . defeated, trying to help someone he knows isn’t, currently, in imminent danger.

  12. Some of these 160 characters or less texts need to be elaborated upon. This is one of them.

  13. Oh, I like this one! Scary and vague, and indicative of unknown horrors!

  14. Oh my. I am loving these so much, I totally want to know what happens here!

  15. It’s amazing how much you can pack into just a few words, isn’t it?

    Great job!

    • Thank you – I tend to get caught up with descriptions and become very, very wordy – it’s a good exercise to consolidate.

  16. reminds me of a scene from one of my WIP πŸ™‚ Definitely scary

    • This is the start for my NaNoWriMo prompt – but if our WIP’s are similar, I’d be really freaked out πŸ™‚

  17. There are so many different directions this can go in…chilling.

    • Well, the direction the TXT recipient should go in is “away.”

      Thanks for stopping by.

  18. Ooh, intrigue. Love it!

  19. Dammit John…I’m going to need more of this story in weeks to come! I’m super freaked out. And curious. A dangerous mix.

    • Well, Nichole – welcome to my NaNoWriMo project . . . you’ll be one of the few who might be asked to read before I’m ready to publicize . . .

  20. This is thriller scary like in a movie! But enough to keep you looking over your shoulder.

  21. YIKES! Well done, sir!

  22. Yes. terrifying. Are you writing the rest of it?

    • Yes, I am, though I have a LOT to figure out. It’s my NaNoWriMo project, but I need to figure out if this happens in the beginning or at the end. I think I’m starting with it.

  23. Yep! That’s scary!

  24. Scary awesome. Definitely gave me chills. I’m trying to figure out what is going on. The first part seems like one thing. The second part confuses me a little. Who’s almost here? Sharks in the water? Bad guys?

    Nice job.

    • Let’s leave it as “bad guys” coming.

      The first part is more an “oops, I screwed up.” The second part is, “it’s worse than we thought.”

      There will be more to come.

  25. Nicely done. The so cold and tired, makes it so final for the texter.

    • That was the goal. The text-er isn’t someone who gives up . . . it’s meant to be final – but I’m not sure how final it will actually play out just yet.

  26. Crikey… what is going on? *shivers*
    http://writer-in-transit.co.za/fear/

    • The “big bad” for my NaNoWriMo project is just getting out of the bag…

  27. oh no this doesn’t sound like any good would come from this. I am afraid

    • Then I’ve set out to do what I was looking to do πŸ™‚

      Thanks for stopping by.

  28. RUN!!! RUN!! RUN!!
    This leaves me wondering what happens next?

    • The only thing I’ll divulge is that the person texted does not run.

  29. Zombies. This is what it made me think of. But…I’ve had zombies as muses for the past 3 nights. Not the kind of muse I want hanging around, LOL. Yes, run!! Run as fast you can.

    • These things are, certainly, zombie-like . . . but I’m still coming up with the rules of their existence.

  30. I think that single word, ‘Run” is what did it for me. Compelling and oh-so-urgent.

    • See – here’s the thing. She doesn’t run. Otherwise the story wouldn’t be exciting.

  31. Zombie Apocalypse. It’s coming.

  32. Yikes. Do you see dead people?

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